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1Given that West Egg’s residents are 2carry out a project to 3recycling,this memo projects 4that city’s landfill will not be up to its capacity within 5 years.The projection is 5base on 6twofold increase in household garbage 7over past two years, and a recent survey indicating more residents intend to do more recycling in the future. Beyond 8these data, more specific 9evidents would 10be still 11need in solidifying the projected result.

12In all likelihood, some household garbage 13account for only some of the materials in West Egg Town Council, which is not 14on behalf 15of total amount of garbage. 16Furthermore, 17recycling materials increase is not 18represent total amount of garbage decline. 19Admittedly if the 20residences of the town previously disposed of certain 21recycling that 22they now recycling instead, then this shift from disposal to recycling would serve to reduce the total amount of garbage 23would be decrease. 24However 25the major is not reference to this change.

26Moreover, we can not ensure other town’s 27residences 28which 29not use it. So many other factors would have an effect on 30our town31 ,which would 32give 33us some 34advices 35to 36do a more useful 37way solving the problems in West Egg Town Council. But the mayor 38fail to give enough 39explain 40to solve the problem.

41Yet ,42as the 43increasing of 44our salary, I refuse to believe the significant influence on town45’garbage46’work 47while the mayor 48seems show too much attention on this project, ignoring the leve of 49our 50live. 51On the other hand , even 52if 53increased price is useful to someone, 54which can not give an evidence to explain the total amount of garbage decrease.55And 56the greater the amount, the less likely higher trash charges would have any effect on how quickly the landfill reaches capacity.

57The mayor’s projection is simply not credible.Rather than relying solely on questionable recycling statistics, the mayor should provide detail statistics for the residences.58And 59the condition of other town’s residences is very important 60to 61solve the problems62, 63whether the amount of trash those people 64contribution is declining or is likely to decline in the near future. 4.0

满分6分

James

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分项说明

In addressing the specific task directions, a 4 response presents a competent analysis of the issue and conveys meaning with acceptable clarity.
A typical response in this category
• presents a clear position on the issue in accordance with the assigned task
• develops the position with relevant reasons and/or examples
• is adequately focused and organized
• demonstrates sufficient control of language to express ideas with acceptable clarity
• generally demonstrates control of the conventions of standard written English, but may have some errors

总评

Welcome to SmartPigai=)

You have tried to make a good analysis and argument about the information the piece.
- The introductory part has been well developed. The counter arguments in the main body have been well developed.
- You have given good comparison of information.
- It is actually recommended that you make some sort of stand point at the end of every paragraph. For example, "Without such convincing evidence that a shift in recycling will affect the amount of garbage, the arguer's claim is still a joke." This can be a sum up sentence of the second paragraph.
- You have developed a good conclusion to the analysis.

You should try to avoid grammar errors. - Try to make your views clear. For example, the clause "the major is not reference to this change" is hard to comprehend. The subject is obscure and the formation itself is poor.
- Be mindful of the verb tenses and use of articles, most especially the definite article.
- In a formal writing, never should "and" be used to start a sentence like you did in your conclusion.
- Avoid unnecessary words that might make the essay verbose.

You can write better if you address the grammar issues and employ standard sentence structures and good vocabulary.

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