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1Nowadays,2 foreign language plays 3a increasingly important role in our society. It provides a solid link for people from different countries and 4background. This link allows us to communicate and learn from each other without5 barrier. I then suggest that everyone should take a foreign language class at primary or secondary 6school despite 7student's learning potential 8may 9vary from one10 to 11another.

12Of course, not 13every students show great interest or 14tanlent in learning a foreign language. 15we often 16found that it is the case for almost every17 subjects taught at schools18, 19but 20can we afford21 for 22some23 student to give up foreign24 langage25 if26 he or she is not talented, can we apply the same principle to other 27subjucts such as science and 28mathmatics, 29obivously we can not.30 In fact, the fast growing economy 31have enable more international trade32 ever in 33the history,34 to 35pocess a foreign 36langiage skill is becoming essential for people in37 business world. The educational system is therefore gradually affected by this trend and almost every school and university offers language classes.38 Furthermore, the reality 39have prevented the idea of giving exception 40for those who are not talented in41 laguage learning. 42Take China for instance, under the current educational evaluation structure, every student enrolled in secondary school will be asked to sit 43in 44the English exam at end of each term. This is 45the results of high education requirements, in which English is mandatory at university entry exam.

46Moreover, there is no doubt that 47school should48 requires every student to take up at least one foreign language, 49becasue 50not only 51we can acquire knowledge52 53but also learn to think in a different way by appreciating 54culture differences. 55other reason56 may justify my earlier proposal is that although not all 57student can turn out as expert 58user of a foreign language, it is 59benifical in 60term of expanding their 61versions and exploring interests.

62 In conclusion, learning a foreign language is vital for our prospective future63, 64everyone in 65the 66school should be required to study a second language. We cannot afford 67that 68majority of 69student who are not 70recognised as talented to lose the opportunity71 to a fantastic learning experience. 4.5

满分9分

James

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分项说明

Task achievement
• generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places
• (A) recounts detail mechanically with no clear overview; there may be no data to support the description
• (GT) may present a purpose for the letter that is unclear at times; the tone may be variable and sometimes inappropriate
• presents, but inadequately covers, key features/ bullet points; there may be a tendency to focus on details
Coherence and cohesion
• presents information with some organisation but there may be a lack of overall progression
• makes inadequate, inaccurate or overuse of cohesive devices
• may be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution
Lexical resource
• uses a limited range of vocabulary, but this is minimally adequate for the task
• may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation that may cause some difficulty for the reader
Grammatical range and accuracy
• uses only a limited range of structures
• attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences
• may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader

总评

Hello, welcome to SmartPigai.

You have made a good response to the topic. Your introduction is well established. It clearly defines the thesis and relates well with what is expected in the main body. The thesis statement has been well developed.

The main body and conclusion have been well developed. The views have been supported by good examples. However, you need to review the presentation of your views in the main body paragraphs. It is important that you put the view to be discussed in the first sentence of the paragraph. For example, the main idea in the second paragraph is that a foreign language helps relate with other nationals at an era when international trade is at its peak. However, the idea is somewhere far in the middle of the paragraph yet it should have been in the first sentence. This helps avoid being wordy. What you put first should have come as an explanation and back up of the main idea.

There is need of addressing the grammar errors. These have affected some parts of the essay. These, mostly one word errors, can be rectified with careful proofreading.
--- Review your use of articles. Any word that starts with a vowel sound should take on "an" not "a". For example, "an" is required before "increasingly" in the introduction not "a". In the second paragraph, "the" should not be used before "English exam". This is because it makes the "exam" specific or known. It is a general idea and thus "an" is required.

--- Be mindful of the tenses and use of prepositions. Refer to the comments for more advice.

You can write a better essay if you address these grammar errors.

Try to use more diversified sentence structures and a wide range of vocabulary too.

Hope to see you again at SmartPigai=)

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