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作者: 极智批改网 来源:极智批改网 2014-06-10

摘要:

四级评分标准与批改报告。完整版下载地址:http://vdisk.weibo.com/s/ucNTrADXl3sD7

四级写作满分评分标准解读

CET作文题采用总体评分方法。从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体,作文应表达题目所规定的内容,而内容要通过语言来表达。要考虑作文是否切题,是否充分表达思想,也要考虑是否用英语清楚而确切地表达思想,也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。

满分15分,根据考试大纲的评分标准,给出的最高的14分评分标准为:

14
分:切题,表达思想清楚。语言通顺,连贯性较好,基本上无语言错误;

解读:

A. “
切题,表达思想清楚:所谓切题,最直观的理解就是不跑题,在四六级英语写作中,跑题是比较难的,因为题目会给出非常明确的观点选择或者命题场景。所谓表达思想清楚,尤其对于四六级写作中的给出两种观点,问你同意哪一个观点的时候,这个时候建议同学们要有清晰的观点倾向,即便你会对比两种观点各自的利弊,最终你清晰的preference是给考官非常重要的信息传递。

B. “
语言通畅,连贯性较好,基本上无语言错误:这一条主要要求考生的语言的逻辑和语言的使用能力。在四六级写作中,虽然不像GREGMAT这种高端逻辑写作对逻辑要求那么高,但是逻辑的通畅也是最基本的,而且只有逻辑通畅了,语言才是通畅的。但是英文作为形合语言,既注重内容逻辑也注重形式逻辑,例如必要的逻辑引导信号,firstlysencondlywhereasonthe other handall inall….都能引领读者和考官更加清晰的把握你的文章的起承转合。关于语言错误,建议大家还是要高标准严格要求自己,用最地道的书面英文进行写作,四六级写作还不是真正的文章写作,但是是非常好的过渡都GRETOEFL、甚至论文写作的桥梁,培养自己书面化表达的严谨性和地道性。



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题型:英语四级作文

题目:201306月英语四级作文

原文字数:164

批改时间:20130822 2113


A young lady is 1teaching student study multiplication table in the classroom. Maybe, 2multiplication table too difficult to learn, suddenly, a girl speak up, 3No offense , but by the time we are in the job market , 4won not that stuff be outdated?” Just at that moment , the teacher alsocan not reply. Exactly as, the lassock said 5, stuff can change , why 6multiplicationtable do not outdated.  


With 7the society of the development, everything is 8happening change. Even knowledge also 9sharpen the saw ,but still have some stuff can not outdated, for example ,multiplication 10table .This isthe basic of math. 11Just as ,one addone always equal to two, as broad as it is long.  


We have to admit 12society is 13progress ,certainly, so  14knowledge does.But some stuff 15won notoutdated. We 16sole make take full advantage of these 17resource.  


18Whatever societyhow to change , please remember 19these basic won 20not outdated. Only 21master thesebasic knowledge, we 22ability to getthere.


错误归类分析:


单词合并错误:

1:批改解释:Error in word combination.修改建议:The phrase should be “teachingthe multiplication table to the students”.

4: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:It’s “won’t” here.

6: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:It should be “can’tmultiplication table be/get outdated?”

7: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:It should be “the developmentof the society”.

8: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:You mean “changing”?

10: 批改解释:Incomprehensible text. 修改建议:It’s better to say “the multiplicationtable which is the basics of math”.

13: 批改解释:Incomprehensible text. 修改建议:Better to use “in progress” or“progressing”.

15: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:It’s better to use “won’t get”or “will not get”.

18: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:It should be “However thesociety develops,”

19: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:Better to use “the basics”here. “The basics of sth” means “the most important and necessary facts,skills, ideas, etc. from which other things develop”.

22: 批改解释:Error in word combination. 修改建议:It’s more reasonable to use “areable to get there”.


从句错误:

2: 批改解释:Clause deficiency. 修改建议:The clause is supposed to be “becausethe multiplication table is too difficult to learn,”.


标点错误:

3: 批改解释:Punctuation error. 修改建议:Add a quotation mark “” here.


连词错误:

5: 批改解释:Incorrect or missingconjunction. 修改建议:Add “since” here.


词义不明(INC)

9: 批改解释:Incomprehensible text. 修改建议:Hard to understand you. Do youmean “is developing fast, but still have to be based on some basic skills”?


中式英语(CHI)

11: 批改解释:Chinglish. 修改建议:Chinglish.


冠词错误:

12: 批改解释:Missing article. 修改建议:Insert “the” here.


词序不当:

14: 批改解释:Incorrect word order. 修改建议:Seems that it should be “is knowledge”,to go along well with “is in progress”.


选词错误:

16: 批改解释:Poor word selection. 修改建议:The word “sole” doesn’t makeany sense here. Did you intend to type in the word “should”?


单复数错误:

17: 批改解释:Error in singular or pluralform. 修改建议:“Resources” should be used here.


单词缺失:

20: 批改解释:A word is missing. 修改建议:Insert the word “get” here.

21: 批改解释:Words are missing here. 修改建议:Add several words here “afterwe”.



得分14.0分(满分30分)


切题 Response to the prompt


文章切题,阐说充分

response to the prompt with adequate explanation


文章结构 Organization

段落组织有序,衔接紧密

well-organized structure, clear and close transition as well


论点扩展和细节运用 Development and Details

段落内句与句连接顺畅,句式使用恰当,用词确切,得体,论证充分

coherent structure, appropriate word usage, adequate exampling


语法 Grammar

表达准确,简单句、复杂句使用流畅

accurate expression, advanced vocabulary with a high degree of accuracy



总评


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Don't be discouraged by theweaknesses of the essay I pointed out. As long as you work harder and becareful enough with details, you'll be an excellent writer. Trust me.



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