2012年6月英语六级范文

题目：The impactof the Internet on interpersonal communication

要求：commenting on

Dad：Hi sweetie, how was school, today?

Daughter: You can read all about it on my blog, Dad"

———————————————————————————————————————

范文：

In contemporarysociety, our life is filled with a variety of anecdotes and stories, thefollowing being a typical representation: "Dad：Hi sweetie, how was school,today? Daughter: You can read all about it on my blog, Dad." Funny as itseems, this conversation is representative of the impacts of the internet onour lives: in the era of the internet, interpersonal communication is oftenimpaired by online chatsessionsand blogs.

Theimpacts of the interneton interpersonal communication are diverse. For onething, as a vital invention the internet brings great convenience to oureveryday communication, eliminates the distance barrier, and helps people tokeep in touch with anyone from anywhere and at any time. Additionally,这个用词表顺接关系，用在这里明显错误it is theinternetthat inhibits familymembers, friends and classmates from communicating face-to-face.One case in point is that youngsters, who may spend hours chattingwith acquaintances through QQ or MSN, rarely talk with others face to face.Unfortunately, if we let this trend to continue as it is, interpersonalrelationships will certainly be negatively affected.

Itis my opinion that people ought to communicate more with their families,friends and acquaintances in real life instead of merely through the internet.We must always bear in mind that theinternetis just a tool.

——————————————————————————————————————

范文剖析：

一、语言表达

文章基本能反映作者英文功底。语言较为流畅，能清晰表述作者写作意图。

推荐句型：

1.Forone thing…For another…在描述一件事情的两个不同方面时，可以使用这个句型，意味“一方面…另一方面…”。

2.One case in point is that…有时用一些新的表达方式与“forexample”、“forinstance”等常用表达方式一起使用，会为文章增色。

3.It is my opinion that…类似的表达方式还有：Inmy opinion…/ From my point of view…等。

二、逻辑结构

本文是传统的三段式表述方式：首段介绍背景引出话题，并简单发表作者观点；第二段就话题进行详细讨论；最后一段总结全文，重申作者观点。

整体框架简单、明了，思路十分清晰，逻辑结构也比较合理。结尾部分略显仓促，没有起到十分好的收尾作用。