Issue-37.Society should identify children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to more quickly develop their talents.

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The argument above asserts that children with special abilities should be identified and offered additional training to help them more quickly develop their special gifts. As far as I am concerned, although I agree that special training should be offered to youth with special abilities, I doubt the program could be adequately carried out.

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本段的第一句复述了题目，第二句提出了作者的观点：可以为年轻的有特殊才华的孩子提供特殊训练，但对题目的recommendation能否充分实现并起作用表示质疑。  

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总起段。先分析题目，后提出观点。  

Special training can play a significant role in developing natural abilities. By taking courses and participating in training programs one can hone those natural gifts. Moreover, such training provided during youth would place an important role in cultivating abilities. Without special training programs, it is possible that the natural talents remain dormant or never reach their full potential in adulthood. It would be ideal to identify and develop these skills starting earlier rather than later.

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总分结构。第一句话提出本段论点，指出特殊训练对发展天赋才能的重要性，涵盖了题目的第一个要点。随后作者论证了special training对培养能力和磨练水平的贡献，并且使才能不至于被埋没。  

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论点一，围绕special  training展开论述，说明特殊训练对发展才能有很重要的作用。  

Nevertheless, the problems involved in identifying talented children and setting up training courses for them must be addressed. On one hand, to carry out such a directive, a governing body would have to first identify not only talented children but also which talents are most critical for training. There can really be no clear standards for such measurements. On the other hand, people have to realize another undesirable consequence. The identification of talented children would indicate to other young students that they are not special. As a result, identified students may form a sense of superiority while others will form a sense of inferiority.

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总分结构，论点为段首句，作者为其提供了两点支持。发现和训练天才儿童容易遇到问题。那么可能是哪些问题呢？首先是难以制定标准。谁是天才儿童？哪种才能需要training？实在无法清晰地界定。其次，为天才儿童提供特殊训练，其他孩子怎么办？同龄儿童之间产生优劣感是否利于他们成长。  

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论点二，围绕identify  talented children展开论述，说明发现天才儿童和为他们提供训练容易带来一些问题。  

Besides the problem just discussed, it is too optimistic for people to believe that special training for talented children will eventually make them excel in their areas of ability. Students who receive such training are also caught up in lots of attention and expectation from teachers, parents and other social entities, which may result in unbearable pressure. This pressure could undermine their performance. For example, the program of educating teenage college students in China two decades ago demonstrates the negative consequences. While these identified talents received higher education from a young age, few of the students turned out any great achievements because most of those students suffered from excessive pressure during study. In reality, eventually, many of those originally talented students were ruined by the psychological problems such as being afraid of failure, unwilling to communicate with others, and so forth. This failed project proves that special training for talented children may be counterproductive.

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依旧是总分结构且段首句为论点。这一段论述了提供给天才儿童的特殊训练最终不一定达到让他们的才能更出色的目的。作者指出，接受训练的天才儿童得到多方关注，有可能造成压力过大，因而影响表现。本段用中国20年前培养少年大学生失败的例子作为支持，说明培训天才少年可能达不到预期效果。  

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论点三，围绕着training的目的能否达到进行论述。作者认为特殊训练不一定能让天才儿童的能力得到积极发展。  

In short, while I agree that special training for talented young students certainly has benefits, the difficulties of identifying those talented children and the negative effects associated in their special trainings must be addressed.

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作者用一句话总结了自己的论述。他/她虽然同意为天才儿童提供特殊训练能带来好处，但更关注题目所提recommendation的弊端。  

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总结全文，重申论点。  

满分要素剖析

一、语言表达
这篇GRE issue作文语言简洁，表意清晰。作者用到了一些GRE级别的词语和表达使文章不仅说理清楚，而且很具可读性。一些语法知识的运用也体现了作者的语言功力。

1.As far as I am concerned, although I agree that special training should be offered to youth with special abilities, I doubt the program could be adequately carried out. 我们在此关注这句话中的两个点。第一，开头的as far as I am concerned不仅使论调显得严谨，还提醒了我们concerned的用法。此句的Concerned是一个源自concern动词的形容词，表示有关的，有牵连的，整个词组表示就……而言，也就是I think，in my view的意思。第二，后面doubt的意义和用法。尽管一般来说是后接宾语从句，但此处不是加whether或if表示怀疑之意的用法，而是后接that连接的宾语从句时（本句省略了that），译为“认为……未必可能”。

2.Moreover, such training provided during youth would place an important role in cultivating abilities. 这句的provided during youth是过去分词provided作后置定语，修饰training，可以理解为是定语从句的that is被省略了。

3.Nevertheless, the problems involved in identifying talented children and setting up training courses for them must be addressed. 注意本句末尾address一词的用法。它在此显然是一个动词，在GRE级别的考试中，它不仅作名词表示地址，而且很多时候作动词，表示处理、对付、着手解决，即think about and begin to deal with something。

二、逻辑结构
本题给出的recommendation有三个要点：1，发现特殊才能儿童；2，在他们年幼时提供训练；3，这是为了发展他们的特殊才能。论述时理清了三者之间的关系，才算是完整涵盖了整个论题。本文作者采用总分总结构写作了本文。首先提出论点。接下来的三段分别论述了：第一，特殊训练对培养天才的能力有好处；第二，发现天才儿童和实施特殊训练可能遇到的问题；第三，特殊训练是否可以达到预期效果，令天才少年的才能得到发展。最后总结全文。可见作者的论述严谨地涵盖了题目recommendation的三个要点。